Everybody left. I’m all alone now. Well, there’s MCM and the cat of course. I call it Catigula. Or Ghenghis Khat. It’s devious enough for that.

In other shocking news. I’m third in the points ranking, but 300 points behind. This has never happened before. I feel like such a failing fangirl. Woe is me. And I know I should make use of the time now that everyone is gone to get ahead in the points departement, but all the questions are choice questions, so I don’t like to spam the same answers all the time. I need questions I can give 20 different answers to!

Meanwhile, Kani is obviously in a pickle… Mmmmmmm. Pickles. I adore pickles.

Kani woken up early. She’s taken aside by Alex, who doesn’t touch her, but keeps her close against the wall. Be a good girl and do the right thing without thinking, and he might see her later. Sent out with Wynn who tells them to stick to the Black Clan, basically reign havoc down on the event. Kani challenges Wynn: is this really what Alex wants? Destruction? Wynn demands to know who died and made Kani Alex’s spokesperson. She has her orders, and her orders are to keep the Black Clan in line. Now shut up and do as you’re told. Time to make some noise. Wearing costumes to look like political leaders, sneak through streets without attracting attention. Throw off costumes and start wrecking everything they see. Riot police surround them, tensions growing. Molotov cocktails lit. Kani and Simon freaking out. And then Alex shows up like the messiah, urging the police to stay calm, that they can work this out together. Wynn throws a bottle at him, takes him out. SHOCK. Police let loose, and she’s on the front lines.

The Audience Suggestions:

#3D1D #c25q1: Something to smell like // smells like teen spirit by @am_harte
#3D1D #c25q2: Number between 20 and 40 // 22 by @am_harte
#3D1D #c25q3: Lit or unlit // lit by @am_harte

As you can see the whole Gossamer thing isn’t mentioned in the outline, and that’s because it’s actually a major plotline that MCM forgot to put in throughout the story. I know Gossamer was mentioned in Typhoon, though I forgot what he was actually being prosecuted for. Well, MCM didn’t confirm that that’s the thing he forgot to put in, he just said he forgot to insert a big hint, which he had left out of the outline so we wouldn’t notice, and that he had to work in now. So I’m betting on that being Gossamer, but it’s possible that that’s just a distraction. It’s still MCM we’re talking about after all.

About the Wynne action, I’m not sure she did it because she’s a woman scorned, or because she has a different agenda altogether. More mysteries than answers as ALWAYS!!

IMPORTANT

MCM is going to take a short nap, so there won’t be any updates for about 2 hours. I’ll be having dinner myself, but not to worry, we’ll be back.

I know the title makes no sense but I wanted to work in a reference to The Room somewhere, so there. And anyhow, MCM’s funny antics on camera ARE tearing me apart… with laughter. Some choice screenshots:

MCM’s average facial expression when no one is looking. Notice the clear monkey resemblance:

MCM shows the audience how many brain cells he has left:

Trying to garner sympathy from the audience. The attempt fails miserably:

MCM’s true nature as a psycopath revealed:

The point of livewriting comes to light: MCM asks for $1 million billion.

I am sad that I will be going out tonight for my brother’s birthday celebration. Will someone please screenshot the funny video moments?

(ANNA) 10:45 EST

Had to add this one as well, since MCM is having so much trouble with his cat! That cat keeps clawing him and distracting him… now they are at a tense stand-off

(Eli) 10:54 MCM’s time

And my bit:

Muahahaha.

Anna had to go sleep. Nancy had to go game. So it’s only BRAVE Cathi and myself here backstage. Only 1 more chapter to go.

Can I say DAMN you MCM!!! While reading I went: “I KNEW CAFFO WAS BAD! I was right I was right I was right! DAMN I WAS WRONG! Why do I never see this coming??!!!” Quite the rollercoaster. Anna is going to be all HAHA I got it right when she finds out who was behind it all. I think MCM just likes to play with me.

So now all that is left is the personal issues that need to come together. I’m curious if it will be a drugged spiced ending like the previous one.

Over and out and anxious for more.

Jan.

Oh before I forget, Cathi posted this beautiful picture of the sunrise. Yes. the sun is already shining on her side of the world. She’s even crazier than me!

OMG THE CLIFFHANGERS!!! I don’t know what to think anymooooore. Is Lucas a bad guy? Or is Darvey not there because he’s after the bad guys? But would he be allowed to go after them / him on his own? I don’t think so. So Darvey has been taken out of the picture somehow. So then where was he when talking to his ghostly wife? I have to admit this more or less went how I thought it would go, except for Lucas being there. I don’t trust him, but I think that’s because I don’t like him.

Also, I think the masks were against the Fel disease? or against the fumes?

I want more and I want it fast, but at the other hand I don’t want it to end yet!

Also, I got to press the red button that sends out questions for the last time. Or maybe last time. I’ll miss the POWER.

Over and out!

(Anna) 4.45 pm PDT
AHH! Hey was I right or what? It seems Lucas isn’t influenced by Jyi’s emotion amplifier thingy! Ha! But I am surprised Lucas was there. And where is Darvey? Chasing down the other bad guys? Fighting off Aphid? Hm.

Jan — the masks were against the fumes. Fel said that earlier to Jyi. Gosh.

That is all I have to say.

You see, unless you’re involved in the thick of these things, typing furiously away, cursing at the breakable console as you try to get demented answers to the chapter questions into the stream, and, for us backstage-pass holders, discussing tentacles and physics in a secret chat room with MCM, well, you’re not really going to get it.

But I love it. I love that sense of community that can build across the internet. It’s not something the “normal” people understand, but, well, they’re lame. Fine, that’s a lame insult, too. I’m tired. Give me a break.

As for how things have been backstage… it’s almost like being in a VIP area of a club, you know? All these exciting people milling around yelling nonsense, the true stars (in this case, MCM) only popping their heads in now and then before running away to somewhere more hidden from us crazies e.g. the dinner table.

Anyway. It’s been fun.

So. For the last time. The outline:

Lucas asks Jyi if she is okay. She lies about getting the antidote, and he accepts it without question. They finish processing the Tobors, have call with Orillians, who [THREATEN OR PRAISE]. Jyi makes not-so-subtle threat that the Tobors may give up the masterminds, and the Orillians laugh, say Tobors are famous for not having masterminds…
Darvey furious. He wants to pursue Orillians, but Jyi admits there’s no real evidence tying the two sides together. All the same, the Orillians won’t be going after Earth again any time soon… the active genocide plot has triggered more active Confederation protection for Earth, meaning the planet is relatively safe…
Relatively? Well, the last time someone asked for better protection on a non-spacefaring planet, it brought all the scum of the universe down on them, looking for easy marks. [BIG CRIME PROBLEM] Safe from military incursions, not criminals.
Jyi asks Darvey if he’s going to stick around, or if they can interest him in an accidental needle to the brain or {Najela:[A WAY TO KILL SOMEONE]}. He says he’s going to have to put off his suicide for a while longer, because if the Earth is going to be at the mercy of this kind of opposition, they’re going to need more competent protection than Jyi and her band of losers can provide [UNDERSTAND OR MISS THE POINT].
They eat a modest but filling meal of {Najela:[THREE WEIRD FOODS]} and have a toast of {Najela:[ALCOHOLIC BEVERAGE]}to a job well done, and discover the food and drinks have all been spiked with {Najela [POISON LIQUID]. Darvey’s more than anyone’s. Things are looking good. There are {Najela:[THREE THINGS YOU MIGHT SEE IN AN ACID TRIP]}
And then an explosion rips a hole in the hull,a [Najela: [A LARGE ITEM]] gets sucked out and things go black.

And can I just do one more tired little dance for having 3 (three!) of my answers picked in this last chapter? The insertion of “janoda juice” was just to get her back for the “Anna brain juice” thing from earlier on. And the three weird foods, rok, golli and jan? Based off of the backstagers here with me.

Anyhows. As MCM would say, thanks for being part of the problem.

Over and out.

(JAN 9.23 pm EST // 3.53 the next day at me) Anna writes lovely, even when she’s close to death. I loved many things about this event. Some were the same as before (like MCM having dinner really early, even when he only has 1 more chapter to write) others were new, but it was all great fun. Yet I feel it can still be better. Ideally the Backstage shouldn’t be backstage, because it is so much fun being silly together, fighting sleep together, making it until the end together.

#2D1D was lovely, the people behind the scene were even more so, and the console was very sci-fi, as it didn’t do what we espected :p

As for the last chapter, I loved it. It was funny, (some truly genious lines!!) I was referred to as normal ( okay I admit, I also caused hallucinations, but Aphid was my girl already anyways!) and we end with a BomB.

I quote:

MCM
04:03
HA!
there have to be 3 explosions
Jan Oda
04:03
so there will be more stories?
MCM
04:03
yeah, this is the first of a series

Some things will never change Rests us only 2 more questions. Why was the girl kidnapped?

And how will we call our team? All superhero teams have a name, so I say th same goes for aliens. SUGGESTIONS ARE VERY WELCOME

Over and Out!

(Mike G, aka ‘mjgolli’) 8.08 am ET the next day, 7 Dec 2009…
It is hard to believe that 2d1d is over! I miss it already, even thought I wasn’t really active during the whole thing and didn’t really add much chaos to the already terrific outline that MCM had up. But, was it fun? Oh, absolutely! It was a treat having an invite to the backstage festivities and getting to sit in on the shebang in real time.

Speaking of real time, I think that MCM has gone and taken the act of writing to a new level. Web fiction, even though it is in its relative infancy, has been the forefront of new ‘interactive’ media where authors can connect and collaborate with others, fans and fellow writers alike. Not only that, but web fiction authors can actually publish themselves to the world and get noticed whereas paper-bound authors previously could only do so at great expense for self-publishing or by submitting endless copies of works to publishing houses so they can get coveted prizes like rejection letters.

But 2d1d, like 3d1d before it, really did take the art of writing and make it a real time art form. Usually one thinks of a writer toiling for long hours behind an old, beat up manual typewriter with a million-billion miles…er, characters…on it. This project has shown that writing can be truly interactive performance art. It is something that not only gives the writer an interesting challenge to bring different elements in to their story, but also to find away to work around the seemingly impossible bits-n-pieces and monkey wrenches that readers can throw in. It also give the participants a vested interest in seeing the result of their participation. If they like what they see, they will be quite likely to sign on for more and follow along with other works of the writer…er, artist.

I, for one, am in awe of web fiction writers in general. I’ve written some fan fiction, but I don’t like to talk about that because I don’t write well at all and am very apprehensive to share anything. These writers are in a class by themselves! They put their work on display where the whole world becomes your editor, commenter and critique-r. I’m not sure that I could handle that!

If you haven’t already, definitely check out the result of the 3d1d project at http://3d1d.1889.ca/typhoon. You WILL be amazed!

In regards to the 2d1d story, I thought it was great! I was quite pleased that my suggestions were picked a number of times. (In the immortal words of Dr. Zoidberg from Futurama, “Hooray! I’m helping!”) It was wonderful to see the number of people chiming in and having their interesting choices picked. As far as the characters are concerned, MCM gave them a lot of personality which is, in my opinion, the hallmark of great writer. Darvey’s feelings regarding what happened in the first chapter were quite palpable, the devastation felt real. I think a great many people were cheering him on at the end, having redeemed himself. I think he’s going to fit in nicely with the rest of the intrepid crew.

The only thing is that it really didn’t portray the Tobor in a good light and only showed their bad side. Not all Tobor are bad and not all of them are stupid, either! I think there should be a good, kind Tobor that helps out our favorite CSA crew! ;D

That’s just my opinion, though. What say you!?

OUTLINE

The Tobor are about to stab the [JYI or THE GIRL] with [drug] when Jyi makes her move, strangling one with her chains and holding him hostage [DEAD OR ALIVE].  The others aren’t scared.  Her amplifications are being blocked, so she can’t hurt them.  She’s cornered, and there’s nowhere to run.  They reach for their guns.
Just then, the speakers come on and Darvey asks them to surrender.  Five minutes to comply.  They’re about to argue about what to do when five seconds pass, and the power goes out on the ship, including gravity.  The Tobor are freaked, then look at Jyi, who is {{Najela: HEADS=laughing maniacally OR TAILS=smirking}} .
She cripples them with so much terror that by the time Darvey and Kaps arrive, they’re slobbering messes begging for death.  They’re taken into custody, and Jyi helps the Governor’s daughter by telling her {[Najela: YES=a joke OR NO= Words of Encouragement}].The girl starts {Najela:[CHUCKLING NERVOUSLY or CRYING]} giving her some hope and boosting it as much as she can. Jyi pats her shoulder, the girl smiles sadly
Jyi asks why Darvey isn’t dead yet, and he says he’s working on it.  She offers to help, but he doesn’t want to get her in trouble with Lucas.  Bicker all the way back to the ship.

Chapter 21 Answers
Jyi or the Girl?: The Girl by mjgolli
Dead or alive?: Both (Schrödinger\’s cat ftw) by Rok
Heads or Tails?: Kaps,attempting assaniation, hits the coin instead by porlob
Yes or No? : YES YES YES by am_harte
Chuckling nervously or crying?: nervous chuckle, but sounds like malevolent laugh by porlob

(JAN 8.34 EST) It just hit me, why was this girl kidnapped? Anyway, somehow this chapter feels a bit odd. There’s action and all, but it ends as an ending. Not like there is another chapter coming. Which makes me wonder about the questions for the next chapter. Acid Trip? Don’t tell me this was a dream!! On to other more coherent people!

The Answers picked were:

Chapter 20 Answers
Action or reason?: RT @1889ca Action or reason? // reaction by am_harte
Heads or tails?: Can\’t tell with that species by Bismod
A song on the radio.: Do it All Night by Dance Dance Revolution by janoda
Another song on the radio: youtube.com/watch?v=mPp7Vs0mLvA by janoda

The video is the same song. So now he has to use it. I suggest the following. Kaps, finally discovering his lusty feelings for Aphid, sings the song to her so she’d stop lusting after Darvey. A happilly ever After ending indeed. For your convenience, I’ve also copied the, if I may say so, EXCELLENT LYRICS, of the winning song.

Do it with me
I’ll take you to heaven if you make me feel free
Baby do it tonight
Do it allright
Just take me and shake me till I burn up inside

Come on baby

Rap:
You may have good sex
With Sam and Fred and Fritz and Max
You may be the slave
Of Tim and Tom and Ed and Dave
You may do it again
With Hans and Franz and Jack and Ken
But you’re gonna feel so free
When you’re doing it with me

[repeat 1]

[2] Oh do it all night
Do it with me
As hot as a fire and as strong as a tree
Do it tonight
Do it allright
You got it – I knew it – you can do it tonight

[Rap:]
You may find you need
Alfredo, Jerry, Ralph, or Pete
It may be okay with Bernie, Willy, Tim, and Ray
You’ll love to get a kiss
From Andy, Georgie, Red, and Chris
But you’re gonna feel so free
When you’re doing it with me

[repeat 1, 2 (x2)]

Come on do it with me

MCM BY THIS YOU ARE FORWARNED THAT I EXPECT IT TO BE FEATURED OR EARTH WILL DEFINTELY GO TO DOOM NO MATTER WHAT YOU WRITE!!

The Derra arrives in the Terran system, find the Tobor ship is already approaching Earth.  Lucas warns communications so close to Earth are forbidden, but Darvey says they need to break the rules.   Aphid {Najela:[RELUCTANTLY OR WILLINGLY] sides with Darvey.  Darvey resolves the issue with [ACTION OR REASON].
They warn the Tobors to surrender, but get fired at.  They take evasive action (no shields against kinetic weapons) and Aphid asks permission to engage countermeasures.  Kaps begs to be given a chance, that he’s a really good shot… Darvey agrees — disable them so we can question them — Kaps [HEADS: disables them after a short fight and leaves them orbiting; TAILS: disables their engines in the atmosphere and they burn up on descent].  No information forthcoming from the Tobors.
Lucas appalled, trying to smooth over diplomatic niceties with CSA headquarters as Aphid is scanning frequencies, hoping that Jyi is beaming a distress call from somewhere.  Darvey listens in, pause at the sound of [SONG]. At first they don\’t hear it and thinks it\’s {{Najela:[ANOTHER SONG ON THE RADIO]}. But it\’s not that song and it’s not coming from Earth, it’s coming from the Kuiper belt.  It’s the distress call!

It was that song. MCM took me to heaven :p YAY YAY YAY I’m doing a happy dance eurotrash style now :p ALso, great funny quotes in this chapter! Aphid purred. I wonder how insectoids purr. Rrrroaaaaow! Over and out

(Anna) 7.57 pm EST
I am totally spacing out here. It’s ridiculous. But I want to know what’s going to happen next! I’m here on tenterhooks to find out whether Darvey will commit suicide or not.

OR MAYBE… Darvey wakes up and it is all a dream?

Notice how I am pointedly ignoring Jan’s eurotrash ranting? Yeah.

(JAN 8.37 pm EST, Anna forgot to close the edit button :p )

Ha! Ignoring?! Backstage Anna has been rooting for the Ding Dong Song by Gunther, and the subtitled version of Dragostae Din Tei. And this time I have proof!

Anna
00:31

that is worth watching
while i read chapter 19

In the backstage we are all learning each other strange sentences in even stranger languages. We’ve also come up with the plan to make all future songs EUROTRASH. Let’s unite and make MCM shiver. After all, it is the end of the World we’re talking about here! We’ve also discovered a Dutch rapper named MCM. In the linked video he sings about how sorry he is. He also sings about the big and the small MCM, but even I don’t get that, and I speak Dutch FTW!

Aphid and Kaps are bickering about the technique of escaping the bomb earlier.  Aphid suggests {Najela: [ESCAPE PLAN]}Kaps goes off to ready the weapons… Aphid warns Jyi said he can’t shoot anymore, he’s too wild.  He says Jyi was joking, he’s doing it anyway.  Aphid points out the [SOMETHING YOU SHOULDN’T SHOOT] wouldn’t agree. {Rok: Suddenly, the [SIMPLE LIFE FORM STOWAWAY] scurries across the floor, as if afraid to be shot. Neither Aphid nor Kaps seem to notice it, despite the irritating cricket-like noise it makes when it moves (Life form from a previous question, in ch. 10)}
Darvey argues with Lucas about the legality of the techniques he’s using.  Darvey says legalities aren’t important when there are lives at stake.  Lucas disagrees: the key to law enforcement is replicable results that deter crime.  If you don’t build your case carefully, the Orillians will put up a big fight for jurisdiction and sabotage the case.  Also, giving away the game to the Orillians is blowing their carefully-crafted cover.  They may be transferred out of District 27, which would mean Darvey wouldn’t be near his home anymore.
{Rok: Darvey stares directly at the [SIMPLE LIFE FORM], which now has reached their room, but he doesn\’t seem to register that it\’s there. The creature stares back for a few seconds and says [Najela: A JOKE], then scurries again into an out-of-the-way corner.} {Najela:
Wait, the Orillians are in charge of the district Earth is in?  Yes, Earth has one council member, and the other [NUMBER] are Orillian.  So don’t think you can depend on the district authorities to back you up if…
Darvey realizes a power grab when he sees one.  The Orillians aren’t trying to kill Centaurians, they’re developing a drug, using the Tobor to test it, and planning to use it to wipe out the human race!

I love how it was all very obvious 2 chapters ago, and now it’s in the outline officially :p However, if they only have 1 earthmember in the council, is a powergrab really necessary then? As in, don’t the Orrillians have power already?

Chapter 19 Answers
Something you shouldn’t shoot.: crates full of contact explosive by porlob
Number between 10 and 30.: 24 by mjgoilli
Escape Plan: just stroll out, nonchalantly by porlob
A joke: What do you call three indians in a tree? by mjgoilli

Mike totally was a bad slave and entered that joke like a gazillion times. CHEATING I call it!! I wanted my joke to win.

Don’t inhale ramen, you’ll need curtains!!!

It’s really really funny. If you don’t get it. ramen are also windows in dutch. but if you’d inhale spicey ramen, your nose would probably run a lot, soooooo, a handkerchief wouldn’t be enough. No? Anyone? ok. Backing away now.

(Anna) 18.50 EST
Jan forgot to put the time on her post. AND forgot to bold the changed bits of the outline. Gosh! And told a joke that no one will find funny! Double gosh!

Anyway, about Chapter 19? I loved the part where she had trouble hearing the guy at the drive-through! So true!

Can’t wait for the next bit.

(Rok) 19.05 EST

I also want to register my complaint against Mike’s condemnable tactics. Not only he entered that joke a gazillion times, but he wasn’t the one who told that joke backstage in the first place. I was, yesterday! And no one got it or laugh at it. Personally, I’d have preferred a different joke, such as: “Toborians are so fat that when they enter a solar system, an eclipse happens.”

But, we can’t win all the time, so all is well. Mike got this round, but the war ain’t over yet…

Can you believe we’re already so close to the end? Only four more chapters left!

And with that, the outline:

Jyi talks to the girl about the situation, what she’s heard about the Tobor plans. The girl is too rattled to help. The girl is {Najela:[A STRANGE WAY TO CALM DOWN]} to calm herself down
Tobor comes in, discovers Jyi isn’t drugged after all. Points out the disruptor at the far end of the cabin, which is stopping her from amplifying. Laughs that *MJG: freaky* Centaurian *MJG: mind* tricks *MJG: oooohhhh, waves paws around, rolls eyes, general mocking and condescention* won’t stop the plan anyway. After this last test, they’ll be ready to wipe out {Rok: [KIND OF PEST]} on a big scale. Too bad she won’t be around to see it.
She taunts him, asks how he liked it when his race got their {Rok: [ALIEN BODY PART]} handed to them over and over again in the [NUMBER] Year War. He gets angry, threatens to kill her on the spot, says he lost half his family. But then he stops, calms down, and says it’s all fine, because when the Tobor are done with her and her race, the score will be settled.
He leaves. The girl is getting panicky because of the noise interference. The girl is singing {Najela:[SONG]} in a slow monotone to comfort herself. Jyi says not to worry, that she’s got everything under control… And then a herd of magic cows fly by. (joke by jan who hasn\’t read this outline)

Ha at the random editing of the outline by Jan at the end. Just as well MCM wasn’t tired enough to randomly include magic cows, because that would have REALLY made things confusing. But maybe he is a wee bit tired. Why?

Well the chapter questions/answers were:
1. Number between 1 and 5.: 3 by Jan Thomas
2. Kind of pest.: Slug by The_Squirrel_
3. Alien body part.: tentacle knee cap by Rok
4. Song on the radio: Michael Jackson’s Beat It by Rok
5. A Strange Way to Calm Down: tearing strips of paper into tiny bits by alphabete

And MCM seems to have forgotten to use the song suggestion, and he used the tentacle knee cap in the wrong place.

(JAN 5.44 EST)

Time for some predictions. Earth Will Go Down. Or it will get saved marvelously by Darvey. Who will die doing that, but in an ass-kicking way. And at exactly the time Kaps predicted. A true Happily Ever After!! Meanwhile, behind the scenes,stuff gets even more mellow. On to the DOOM

(Rok) 6.08 EST

And Rok scores twice again! Woohoo!! I rock! Well, duh, of course I rock. That’s my name. Silly me!

My prediction is that Darvey will save the day, of course, but will find himself at the very end of the story strapped to a Toborian canister, finally about to fulfill his wish to die. Of course, though, it’s a Toborian bomb and we all know what that means. His final words then are: “Fuck! I can’t seem to get a break!”

Darvey and Kaps argue about how to get back to the Derra without dying. Darvey suggests that they Blowing the bomb out the airlock?  No.  Transporters?  Ha.  Defusing? Don’t know how. Bickering about lack of timer.  Darvey finally uses his grandma’s advice on how to solve problems: [PROBLEM SOLVING].  Kaps is really not sure. Kaps suggests {Najela:[AN ESCAPE PLAN]}
After some quick footwork by Aphid and the Derra, they get back aboard. *MJG: Just in time as bomb explodes and destroys shuttle.* Aphid is [HAPPY OR SAD] to see Kaps.  She’s traced the missing ship: it passed a relay on the way to the Terran system.  They put engines on full blast and pass {Najela:[RANDOM SPACE OBJECT]}.  Gotta catch them!

QUESTIONS:
How to solve a technical problem.: How to solve a technical problem – RTFM! by tenaciousN
Happy or sad?: sappy! by am_harte
An escape plan: swap with lawyer wearing wig by retro_neo
Random space object: trailing garbage by Rok

Lovely chapter. Also, I had no idea what RTFM was, but now it makes sense. YAY for learning new English shortcodes. And what a sick twist that they are now heading to Earth… Which makes the thing I added to the next outline without reading it possibly a tad difficult. But MCM will pass the evil test I’m sure. Over to the others Also LOL at the Tobor Bombs

“A Tobor bomb, you say.”
“Exactly.”
“There’s no way they’re behind this drug plot.”
“No way,” Kaps agreed.

(Anna) 17.14 EST
Just to quote what I just wrote on gchat:

WAIT. I am confused by the end of Chapter 17. Wasn’t Darvey BURNT? Shouldn’t he be feeling the burn? The ring of fire on his FACE?

Did anyone else not think that when reading this chapter? I was so looking forward to Aphid’s reaction. She thought the previous guy’s burnt knee was cute – what would she think of a burnt face? Clearly she’d be coming on to Darvey some more instead of getting all sappy over Kappy.

And did you see one of my answers got picked?

p.s. I notice Jan forgot to bold the changed bits of the outline. Tsk, tsk.