(JAN somewhere between 12 and 13h PDT)

Hey people!

The first chapters have gone life, the first answers have been picked, and the all around insanity has begon. You’ve read it right, #3D1D The New Real 2: Blast Radius has officially commenced! For future easyness of typing (since I am stupid and shut the door on my hand today), we’ll be calling it #3D1D or #TNR2.

Anna is still at work, so for now you guys will have to cope with my silly ramblings only. But I’m sure I’ll manage. Sortof. Like with previous livewriting events we’ll be doing live reporting of everything what’s going on, from the answers that were picked, compairing with the original outline, laughing with MCM’s eating habits, to detailed analysis of what we think will happen.

The rules still haven’t changed. We can write all we want, but no editing whatsoever is allowed. So prepare yourself for horrid typo’s, slightly tired sillyness, and all around insanity.

We are ready, and I hope you are too!

On to the breakdown of the first chapters!

Chapter 1

What a great chapter! I have to admit I’m honoured that the oda juice survived into the second book But even without the heavy drinking, this chapter would still be pretty awesome. It has everything. Action, drama, and a great re-introduction of our beloved crew. Though I really think Jyi can’t blame this mess on Darvey. And who can blame him for wanting to die when you’re sucked out into space, with your whole back burned, your first love death, and your second (yet totally unconcious) love pretty much blown to pieces? She should cut him some slack. Though I’m starting to think Darvey isn’t suicidal at all!

Recap the last moments of TNR1.  Darvey with the gang, seeing his dead wife, asks Aphid what she sees, and then the sludge machine explodes.  Darvey can only see [BLACK OR WHITE].  Confusion.  Hole in ship, oxygen rushing out.  Bulkhead doors at outside slam shut, but there’s a smallish in the middle that keeps things leaking.  Interior bulkhead shuts, locking Darvey off from the rest of the crew.  Except Aphid, who is burnt and about to get dragged into space.  Throws a table against the hole, stops the vacuum, but only briefly.  Desperately arguing with crew about opening emergency hatch.  Override not working.  Kaps races in with [WEAPON] and tries to blast the door, but it doesn’t work.  Gets the sledge and blows the hatch off completely, and they grab Darvey and Aphid and rush out of the cafeteria before the table collapses and finishes off the whole room.

Darvey racing Aphid to medical bay, she’s fading fast.  Her exoskeleton protected her from a lot of the damage, but she’s in bad shape.  Asks Darvey how humans deal with death.  Darvey says [METHOD OF COPING].  Kaps and Lucas start work on Aphid, Jyi and Darvey go out to tend to their own wounds.  Jyi asks if Darvey is all right, and he says yes, but he desperately wants a [DRINK], and doesn’t know why.  He has burn marks on the [FRONT/BACK] of his body, which is going to make it a bitch to sleep.

Darvey thinks Tobor did it.  Or Orillians.  Jyi says no, doesn’t fit either of their MOs.  Sludge machine exploded from the inside, it wasn’t an attack from outside the ship.  The blast from outside would have torn apart more of the inside.  So there was a bomb in the sludge machine?  They leave their wounds and check the surveillance.  Doesn’t go back as far as the last sludge delivery.  Limited memory.  Darvey wishes they had [SCI FI TECH].  This shit never happens on Star Trek.  Jyi getting unimpressed with Darvey again.  Look up WHERE they go it from.  From Mudge Brothers Deliveries, on Panella, jungle planet not far from here.  They agree it’s time to pay that delivery company a visit.

Questions:

Black or white: pick: ivory by tenaciousN

Front or back: pick: Back by JanOda

Type of drink: mint julep by tenaciousN

A method of coping: singing by Jespree

A weapon: pick: sonic cannon by WA_side

Sci fi tech: pick: invisibility gel by tenaciousN

YAY on getting picked, though obviously Nancy (tenaciousN) is the big winner of this round. Pray tell me, what on earth is a Mint Julep?

Chapter 2

I liked the second chapter even better than the first I love Darvey when he’s pissed. He goes all good cop bad cop on his own. Without the god cop that is. But first things first. Anyone else feels like Panella might turn out a parody of Pandora? Or am I looking to much into this? It’s green and lushy, and it starts with Pan :p Okay, I’m obviously looking too much into this. And MCM probably didn’t even see Avatar. The 3D glasses wouldn’t match his hat.

Back to the story. I’m convinced Darvey feels more for Aphid then he realizes. He gets way too emotional for him not to feel anything. Maybe oda juice is also a secret love potion, or she spiked his drink with it, or she sparkled herself with human feromones. One way or another, he’s falling for her, I’m sure of it.

And MCM did promote this story as a Romance, so somebody has to fall in love here. Though I have to admit, I did imagine the background for the “Hold me, biped” line from the trailer totally different. But drama is good. Action too. And for once, I’d like some actual horizontal tango-ing too. MCM is a tease. But romance needs to be a bit gritty at least. And I’m a dirty romance expert!

Before I stop making sense all together, here’s a look at this chapter’s outline:

Darvey and Kaps on Panella.  Darvey continues to rant about it being Tobor, because he generally hates Tobor.  Kaps says to forget prejudices like that, because they cloud your thinking.  Arrive at Mudge Brothers and meet [DOG BREED] Mudge, the older brother.  Mudge tries to argue they plugged the sludge machine in wrong, because their product almost never explodes.  Bicker, argue, and threaten, involving [BREAKFAST], [RELATIVE] and [OFFENSIVE CONCEPT].  Darvey about to whack Mudge over the head with a [OBJECT IN OFFICE] when Kaps drags him back outside, warns they have to be careful with following up these kinds of leads.  If you cross the line, it’s impossible to prosecute.  Darvey’s not keen on prosecuting.  Goes back in, apologizes, explains he would never beat someone over the head with a [OBJECT] unless they were REALLY rude.  Just then, a customer comes in the door.  Darvey says really loudly “This is the third sludge machine that’s exploded on me!  Little Timmy’s ears got blown off!”  The customer leaves abruptly.  Mudge demands Darvey leave, Darvey says it’ll take info to leave.  Mudge won’t admit to the theory of an exploding machine, but gives Darvey an address across town.  They leave, and Darvey asks what kind of name Kn’cho is.  Kaps admits it’s a Tobor name.  Darvey nyah-nyahs.

I think the translator cop-out for all the great but insane things Mudge was saying was a bit too easy, though the end result of that paragraph did remind me of Vogon poetry. So far all suggestions work wonderful though.

Questions:

Dog breed: pick: English Mastiff by tenaciousN

Object in office; swingline stapler by Jespree

Breakfast: pick: eggs benedict by WA_side

Relative: step-cousin by The_Squirrel_

Offensive concept: racist jokes by WA_side

I loved how the English Mastiff played out

What do you think of the writing so far? What have been your favorite suggestions? What would you like to happen in the story? And most importantly, do you think Aphid and Darvey will Kiss at the end?

Keep us posted!